Shopping is now one of the most famous forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. What is the reason? Is it positive or negative

Thers

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There

is no doubt that nowadays many young adults are using shopping as a form of leisure

activity

in many countries.In the next paragraph ,I will discuss why is the reason and

negative

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effects of

this

outcome.

To begin

with,one of the

reason

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is that parents play a significant role in parenting.

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, parental

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have

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many effects on their kids especially when it

come

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to

the

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internet networks

such

as Facebook,Instagram and others.

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example

,no rules or

restriction

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on

srceen

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screen

time will lead to addiction on

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social media.

Consequently

,

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to more freedom and unexpected things will happen.Next,the second reason is an influence from external factors

such

as friends and

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can cause someone to change in order to keep up with the trends.

For

example

,in

this

digital era,

Iphone

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iPhone

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brand devices are the most popular compared to other brands.

On the other hand

,not to

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,

this

activity

also

have

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negative effects on the environment ,a

watse

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waste

of money and

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number of crimes.First,

due to

the high

demands

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in

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fasionable

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fashionable

clothes ,a lot of resource and

meterial

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materials

needs to be used before producing

such

items.

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example

,illegal

poarching

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poaching

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this

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will

has

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a significant impact on the environment and

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the intinction

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intinction

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of some species.Second,

an

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excessive shopping is always a

watse

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waste

of money because people should buy what is necessary for their daily life .

Finally

,young adults need adequate

financial

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to support

this

shopping

activity

.

However

,

an

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inadequate

financial

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will lead to stealing.

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example

,a poor family cannot afford to buy

a

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fasionable

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fashionable

cloth

to

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their kids,

therefore

,a lot of

kid

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kids

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begin to steal in order to keep up with fashion. In conclusion,the public and parents play a big role in educating the younger generation about what is more important for their life and encourage them to

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other

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in other

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activity

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activities

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such

as physical activities.

Overall

, I think

this

pace

have

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negatives

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development

to

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young adults.