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Band 1.5

People should keep all the money they earn and shouldn't pay to the government. Agree or Disagree?

There is a concern regarding the
money
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 given to
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government
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the government
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 by its citizens. Some
people
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 think that
people
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 should keep their hard-earned
money
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 to themselves, but
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government
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the government
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 helping
people
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 is
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 important in mind the favour they get from
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government
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the government
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. Some
people
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 think that
people
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 shouldn't
give
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pay
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taxes
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 to the
government
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. It gets difficult to meet expenses by getting
deduction
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 & in their salary
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, if
person
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a person
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 is giving 10%
taxes
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 on his salary of 30, 000. It would be difficult to live a respectable life. It is
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 said that we should pay
taxes
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 to the
government
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 as it is providing facilities like healthcare, pension and
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 maintenance of roads. In
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 way,
money
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 regulation and balance
is
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 created between rich and poor
people
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. In conclusion, there are many benefits of not paying
taxes
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 to
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government
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, but
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 the
money
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 gets distributed well among
people
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.

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task achievement
Provide a clear stance immediately, establishing if you agree or disagree with the statement. This will guide the clarity and direction of your response.
task achievement
Develop your main points more thoroughly with more detailed examples and explanations to effectively support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Work on the structure of your essay, ensuring a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each section should serve its purpose effectively.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to help the flow of ideas. However, ensure they are used correctly and enhance readability.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public goods, services, infrastructure, taxation, inequality, social unrest, social contract, well-being, security, progressive taxation, redistribute wealth, poverty, level playing field, economic stability, growth, economic freedom, entrepreneurship, over-taxation
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