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You bought a computer, and it is connecting the Internet. Write a letter to an IT specialist to ask for help. -explain the details of the computer; -tell the problem; -ask for help;

#computer #internet #specialist #-explain #-tell #-ask
Dear IT specialist, Hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I'm writing
this
 letter to help you to somehow my new
a
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computer is connecting
the
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 Internet. It is very important in my future plans. I buy
this
 computer from the Atlas Bazar.
However
, I cannot that
a
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 instrument connecting to our Local Internet. Let's clear it up.
That is
, I am
lating
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eating
 the company works. I am misunderstanding the
last
 customs
this
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 equipment. In my
hear
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heart
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, you are
very
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 good master
IT
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.
Therefore
, I call out you.
Also
, you are not, I do not
it
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work.
Likewise
, I
am knowing of
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the
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computer
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is
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 very
much
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 functions and different missions. If that hasn't
working
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, my many works
dissipating
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.
Consequently
, I am leaving work. You help me need to my new equipment is joining
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our Local Internet. In case, you oiler support me, I stimulate you. Yours sincerely, Khusan Esomurodov
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coherence cohesion
Focus on clarifying your ideas and ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea followed by supportive statements. Try to organize your paragraphs in a logical order that makes your letter easy to follow.
task achievement
Ensure that the task's requirements are fully met. This includes providing clear details about the computer, explaining the problem in understandable terms, and making a clear request for help. Using specific details and examples will greatly improve your task achievement score.
general
Work on improving your grammar and vocabulary. This will help you express your ideas more clearly and accurately, which is crucial for both coherence and task achievement.
general
Polishing your writing with practice and guidance will help improve clarity and effectiveness. Consider seeking opportunities for feedback and further learning.
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