Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobd are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Whether genders
in
occupations is an increasingly concerning topic of debate. Some people maintain Add a missing verb
are in
men
and women have their own performance, which then
leads to a number of particular jobs are
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being
men
and the rest are
for women. The writer of Wrong verb form
being
this
essay agrees to
the given statement Change preposition
with
due to
health strength and their
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apply
personalities
and will shed light Fix the agreement mistake
personality
in
the latter.
There are countless reasons why people believe Change preposition
on
this
. Among them is because of each gender’s durability, in terms of men
, they are involved in hard works
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work
such
like
constructing and engineering Change preposition
as
that
were women’s weaker side. Correct pronoun usage
which
Although
several exceptions are
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have
occurring
in recent days that proved they possess the ability, Wrong verb form
occurred
however
, the qualities might be different as for centuries, men
had
been maintaining the habit of completing tough Wrong verb form
have
works
.
Another culprit of Fix the agreement mistake
work
this
is women are careful in everything which
their counterparts do not own Correct word choice
and
this
skill. Because of this
, numerous jobs, for instances
doing business and planning are increasingly suitable for females in spite of a small number of males Fix the agreement mistake
instance
can
do it. Correct pronoun usage
who can
Nevertheless
, the quality gap between two
genders Correct article usage
the two
are
still enormous, in fact, females in Asian regions are frequently forced to stay at home doing chores and care for babies Correct subject-verb agreement
is
since
the very early years, Change preposition
from
therefore
they may got
used to doing Change the verb form
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be got
this
and as mentioned, there are few of them being leaders in the world at the moment.
In conclusion, I strongly agree to
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with
this
view due to
the mentioned opinions. However
, I encourage all males and females to take part in any jobs that they pursuit
as there are no discriminations and preventions.Replace the word
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