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Some people think increasing the cost of fuel is the best way to solve global environmental problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #cost #fuel
Nowadays,
people
 use a
lot
 of
fuel
, because of the large number of cars, the impact of
fuel
 on the environment is very strong, but despite
this
,
people
 continue to pollute the environment. Currently, various solutions are being considered by the government to prevent
this
, an example of
this
 is the increase in
fuel
. On the one hand,
people
 are consuming a
lot
 of
fuel
, but they don't think that it has a negative effect on our country, and
this
 is the basis for increasing
fuel
 consumption, which is related to the destruction of the ozone layer in the atmosphere and the rise of various
smokes
Change the wording
clouds of smoke
show examples
 into the air. It doesn't matter because there are a
lot
 of poor
people
 in our country,
besides
, they need to go to the hospital. If the residents whose houses are far away want to ride on the street and ask for a shared price when they want to hail a taxi, it will be very difficult for the
people
's lifestyle and cause a shortage of
people
.
On the other hand
, what can cause
people
 to use so much
fuel
? An example of them is the smoke coming out of different types of industrial equipment, and there are a
lot
 of cars in our capital, so the knots
also
 cause the release of various wastes from the human body and nature, which affects the animal world and the plant world.
In addition
, the bacteria that appear in the atmosphere have a negative effect on human life, which is a danger to the lives of our young
people
 and our elder grandparents. we will contribute to its recovery My conclusion
that
Add a missing verb
is that
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 dear
people
, let us contribute to our lifestyle and environmental health and save our country from various calamities, in our own hands.
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Structure your essay more clearly with distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and transition smoothly to the next.
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Use topic sentences to start each paragraph, indicating the main idea of that paragraph. Support these ideas with specific examples or reasons.
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Directly address the essay prompt in your introduction and conclusion, clearly stating your opinion on the issue.
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Develop your ideas more comprehensively by explaining how and why raising fuel prices can or cannot solve environmental problems. Include more specific examples or data to support your points.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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