You came to know about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – describe the equipment – explain how it might be useful at your workplace – offer help in purchasing it

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Dear Mike, I have noticed that our client businesses are inviting many of our colleagues on long business requirement gathering calls which is good for our business as clients are building more trust in our employees .

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, Sometimes it is quite tiring for our staff to take back-to-back calls from the desk. I have noticed colleagues raising

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concern in office forums for the same. I want to propose an idea to shift office headset type from regular wired headsets to Bluetooth

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. Regular wired headphones limit

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mobility and leave you with no choice, but Bluetooth headphones give you a mobility advantage and employees can move around cubicles and go for coffee breaks without getting off business calls.

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doing online comparisons among different Bluetooth headphones brands. We have identified Sony offers the best deals for corporate buying.

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, their device's user review mentions good connectivity and reliability when compared to other manufacturers. I would request you to check Sony's offering from their official website and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Sandeep

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task achievement

While the letter covers the key points required by the task, it could be enhanced by providing a more detailed description of the equipment and elaborating on its specific features.

coherence cohesion

To improve the logical structure, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and ideas flow smoothly from one to the next.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is appropriate for a formal business context, showing respect and professionalism.

coherence cohesion

The letter is structured with distinct paragraphs, each addressing a different aspect of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

179 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

state-of-the-art
ergonomic
cost-effective
streamline processes
boost productivity
enhance efficiency
high-quality
integrate into our workflow
ROI (return on investment)
implement
facilitate
procurement

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You came to know about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – describe the equipment – explain how it might be useful at your workplace – offer help in purchasing it

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Many young people today spend a lot of time playing electronic game. Is this a positive or negative development?

Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Success is often measure by wealth and material belongings. Do yout hink wealth is the best measure of succes? what makes a successful person?

In the modern era, it is easy to sell, buy and work with others through the internet. But others are against it. Do you think this is a positive trend or a negative trend?

Write about the following topic: The tradition of families getting together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?