some people think increasing the cost of fuel is the best way to solve global problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree
Today, increasing
fuel
prices
is
leading to solving global environmental problems.because increasing the price of Change the verb form
are
fuel
is less than this
, it is beneficial for the environment.While
the proximity of nature is less used, trees are useful for all kinds of plants. It is also
effective for under the year
redness.But if the price of proximity is increased, it will Add a hyphen
under-the-year
also
lead to people
's dissatisfaction.Because the number of cars running on fuel
in our country is very large.
Firstly
, higher fuel
prices
for fuel
people
to switch to environmentally friendly
transportation
mode. As travel by private vehicles such
as cars or motorcycles become
more expensive, Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
people
that
work in nearby offices from their Correct pronoun usage
who
home
will tend to commute by foot or Fix the agreement mistake
homes
bicycles
to save more money. Fix the agreement mistake
bicycle
Similarly
, employers that work in offices located far away from their
will shift to public Correct pronoun usage
them
transportation
like buses or trains. As a result
, less and less emission is produced from commuting, which will save the world from climate changes
.
Fix the agreement mistake
change
Secondly
, the higher cost of aviation fuel
makes travel by plane more expensive than previously. Planes emit a lot of pollution that leads to warmer Earth temperature
,but many Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
people
prefer using planes even for short distance
Add a hyphen
short-distance
travels
that are accessible for land mode Correct subject-verb agreement
travel
transportation
. It means
people
can use green transportation
mode
like electric trains and cars that are able to get electricity from solar panels. Expensive plane tickets will make Change the noun form
modes
people
tend to use these electric
Change the determiner
this electric transportation
transportation
for short distance
trips. Resulting in less pollution emitted from planes Add a hyphen
short-distance
to
the atmosphere.
In conclusion, raising Change preposition
into
fuel
prices
is not good for people
but raising fuel
prices
is good for nature. Also
the production of a lot of fuel
poisons the air of the environment and can poison the breathing of mankind.Submitted by soglomovsarvar on
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