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In the modern world, many employees lack soft skill such as communication and working in the teams. What are the main causes of this problem? What are the effects of the lack of such skills ?

Nowadays, a large number of workers have fewer abilities in working with their peers.
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 worldwide issue, including some implications. In my experience, the specific causes of having no skills in communicating with others could be
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 issues and addiction to electronics. Being afraid of people can lead to trauma, where individuals stop believing each other, which could be because of many things that happened during someone’s childhood.
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, seeing something horrible from a person whom we adored as little children, can make us have some
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 problems toward everybody.
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, being addicted to a platform
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 full of technological radiation could easily contribute to many mental diseases. To my mind, it can be seen that the causes mentioned in the first paragraph could lead to many effects
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 a person, like having less confidence and fewer relationships. Without believing in ourselves, we will lose many speaking skills, which could make humans not
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 themselves to give a speech on a stage.
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, staying at home for a
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 would cause an individual to lose control of making conversations. Because of that, people will never gain the ability to say a word in front of many humans.
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, that problem could kill the talent of having friends in life. In conclusion, being addicted to technology and having some
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 issues toward everyone are leading our employees to have no communication skills.
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 less confidence and fewer friends.

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coherence
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task achievement
You introduced the topic clearly and attempted to discuss the causes and effects of the problem.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Soft Skills: Attributes that enable someone to interact effectively and harmoniously with other people.
  • Communication: The imparting or exchanging of information by speaking, writing, or using some other medium.
  • Teamwork: The combined action of a group, especially when effective and efficient.
  • Remote Communication: Communication that occurs when parties are not physically present, often through digital means.
  • Overemphasis: Excessive emphasis on a particular aspect.
  • Individualistic Culture: A social theory favoring freedom of action for individuals over collective or state control.
  • Trickle-Down Effect: The cumulative effect that smaller or marginal changes can have when initiated at higher levels.
  • Competitive Work Environment: A work setting where employees are constantly striving against one another to achieve success.
  • Specialized Job Roles: Positions that require expertise in a narrow field or specific set of skills.
  • Face-to-Face Interactions: Direct, in-person communication between individuals.
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