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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choices of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #culture #character #choices #clothes
Many populations agree on the possibility
to know
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 about other
people
's culture and
personality
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personalities
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according to
 their
garnment
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garment
 choices.
This
 essay disagrees with that statement
,
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 because each person
portraits
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 their own personal style and
likings
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,
as well as
 it tends to create a prejudice around certain groups of
people
 that
dress
 in a specific way.
Dressing
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 has always been
considereded
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considered
 as
an
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 statement or
represetation
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representation
 of each one as an individual, whether
people
 tend to follow certain trends or
dress
 codes, it is still an
extention
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extension
 of
people
's
creativy
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creativity
creative
 or style.
According to
 recent studies made by the University of Milan in 2020, fashion has occupied a concise and unconventional method to exteriorize political opinions or make affirmations regarding
to
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economical
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 or social movements.
Moreover
, not only is widely
innacurate
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inaccurate
 to
asume
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assume
 a person's culture or personality by their clothing, but it
also
 creates
a
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 inconciuss prejudice that enables societies to
pin point
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pinpoint
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at
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certain
individuals
 or groups of
people
 who tend to
dress
according
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 non-traditional standards.
For example
, there is a pre
coincived
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conceived
 idea around
people
 that
dress
 in 'gothic' manners; often associating these
individuals
 to be inclined to darkness, and obscure practices, abstaining 'regular'
people
 from bonding with
such
indiviuals
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individuals
.
A
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 NGO called 'Be
who you are
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' conducted a series of
street-interviews
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street interviews
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 in 2019 to ask pedestrians about their assumptions of
people
that
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 were dressed with extravagant attires, most of the answers deemed and labelled these
individuals
 into different cultures or even assumed they belonged to a cult, and their demeanor could be rather threatening or condescending. These assumptions were faced with the reality that they radically
missjudged
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misjudged
miss judged
 the
individuals
, since they did not
belonged
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 to any sort of cult and their personalities were actually
approcheable
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approachable
 and kind. In conclusion,
while
 is an
easy-route
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 to have
pre-coinceived
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pre-conceived
 notions about
people
's culture or personal behaviour based only on their clothing,
this
 conception is often
missguided
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misguided
, in light of the fact that each person represents their tastes and styles through clothing and these ideas pose as prejudices rather than facts. To respect and be open-minded to all
sort
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sorts
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 of
people
 could construct a better society, in a way to
also
 accept different cultures and characteristics.
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