Society is experiencing an increase in many problems such as crime and drugs abuse due to urbanization. Give some suggestions to control this trend.

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of drugs and abuse
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increasing and it creates numerous disputes around the world
due to
modernization and civilization. There are two solutions that can control
this
tendency
such
as increasing employment opportunities and creating awareness.
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essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are two possible solutions that can control social problems. One of the practical remedies is
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job opportunities among the population in order to people have a regular income and respectable status, so they
far
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away from using drugs. Unemployment and
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle are the main
reason
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reasons
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for humans being drug
addict
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addicts
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.
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,
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and developing nations
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social issues because many people are unemployed. Needless to say, crime and abuse can
overcome
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by increasing employment chances
to
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the
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youngsters. Another possible solution is
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the
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awareness among the population about abuses and crimes by imposing strict laws like lifetime sentences and deadly sentences. When a law becomes strict
while
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humans
have
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afraid to do any criminal activities.
For instance
, the Gulb nations have strict laws against culprits namely deadly punishment,
as a result
, those
countrie's
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countries'
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crime rates are quite low as compared to other parts of the world.
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, the authority should impose
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strict law enforcement
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individuals who
misbehaves
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along with
threaten
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threats
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to children and
minor
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minors
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.
To conclude
, in
this
modern era, social issues are increasing rapidly
due to
organisation
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organisations
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but
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apply
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creating
the
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awareness by imposing
a
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apply
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strict
law
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laws
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against
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criminals
as well as
increasing employment opportunities among the youths that can overcome social issues.
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