Society is experiencing an increase in many problems such as crime and drugs abuse due to urbanization. Give some suggestions to control this trend.
In
this
modern era, use
of drugs and abuse Correct article usage
the use
are
increasing and it creates numerous disputes around the world Change the verb form
is
due to
modernization and civilization. There are two solutions that can control this
tendency such
as increasing employment opportunities and creating awareness. This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
There are two possible solutions that can control social problems. One of the practical remedies is that
Change preposition
to
increasing
job opportunities among the population in order to people have a regular income and respectable status, so they Wrong verb form
increase
far
away from using drugs. Unemployment and Add a missing verb
are far
sedentary
lifestyle are the main Correct article usage
a sedentary
reason
for humans being drug Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
addict
. Fix the agreement mistake
addicts
For example
, Under developed
and developing nations Correct your spelling
Underdeveloped
are suffered
Wrong verb form
suffer
Change preposition
from this
this
social issues because many people are unemployed. Needless to say, crime and abuse can Correct determiner usage
these
overcome
by increasing employment chances Add a missing verb
be overcome
to
Change preposition
for
the
youngsters.
Another possible solution is Correct article usage
apply
that
Change preposition
to
creating
Wrong verb form
create
the
awareness among the population about abuses and crimes by imposing strict laws like lifetime sentences and deadly sentences. When a law becomes strict Correct article usage
apply
while
humans Correct word choice
apply
have
afraid to do any criminal activities. Verb problem
are
For instance
, the Gulb nations have strict laws against culprits namely deadly punishment, as a result
, those countrie's
crime rates are quite low as compared to other parts of the world. Change noun form
countries'
Hence
, the authority should impose a
strict law enforcement Remove the article
apply
to
individuals who Change preposition
on
misbehaves
Correct subject-verb agreement
misbehave
along with
threaten
to children and Replace the word
threats
minor
.
Fix the agreement mistake
minors
To conclude
, in this
modern era, social issues are increasing rapidly due to
organisation
Fix the agreement mistake
organisations
but
creating Correct word choice
apply
the
awareness by imposing Correct article usage
apply
a
strict Correct article usage
apply
law
against Fix the agreement mistake
laws
the
criminals Correct article usage
apply
as well as
increasing employment opportunities among the youths that can overcome social issues.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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