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Band 6

There are not enough recycling bins in your neighborhood. Write a letter to your local council to install more recycling bins. In your letter: - explain the situation; - state its importance to the environment; - ask for more recycling bins.

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Dear Sir I am writing to you about the need for more recycling bins in
this
 town. Having witnessed a notable increase in plastic and other waste on the ground in our town, I am disappointed about
this
 and wish to express my dissatisfaction with the. As you know, the population in our area has more than ten thousand over the past
one
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year. Because of
this
, having extra recycling bins would not only mean a cleaner environment but
also
 reduce the work of the council to keep our streets clean.
Therefore
, I kindly request that you consider
this
 matter seriously and make the necessary arrangements regarding increasing the number of recycling bins. I believe in your leadership and vision in making the best decision. Thank you for your attention to
this
 matter, and I eagerly await your response.
Your
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 faithfully Maxmudov Akbarshoh
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear logical flow between paragraphs. Your letter currently transitions somewhat abruptly between expressing dissatisfaction and suggesting solutions. Consider adding transitional phrases to guide the reader more smoothly between ideas.
coherence cohesion
In the greeting, it's generally better to address the recipient more specifically if possible, such as 'Dear Council Member' or 'Dear [Council's Name] Representative', to add a personal touch and show that the letter is specifically addressed.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to enhance clarity and ease of reading. For example, your first paragraph mixes expressing dissatisfaction with describing the situation. Try splitting complex ideas into separate paragraphs.
task achievement
Fully develop your response by including more specific examples or explanations of how the lack of recycling bins directly affects the community and the environment. This makes your argument more compelling and demonstrates a deeper understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Maintaining a suitable writing tone is integral, and you have done well in this regard. However, the letter could be enhanced by ensuring grammatical correctness and clarity in expressing your points. Small errors can distract from the importance of your message.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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