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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.
#indicators #four #countries #nations #statistics #information
The table illustrates that about the information
of
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 social and economic indicators for different four
nations
such
 as
Canada
,
Japan
,
Peru
 and Zaire over the period
in
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 1994.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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Japan
 and
Canada
 had the highest indicators among the given other
nations
.
According to the
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 table shows that
annual
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the annual
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 income per person
had
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was
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 the highest earnings country of
Japan
, at 15760 dollars as compared to Zaire, which was
130$
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 only. The second highest income
earners
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earner nation
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nations
 was
Canada
, at 111000$ and
Peru
 had 160$.
Similarly
,
Japan
 and
Canada
 had led the first and second position
of
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 life expectancy at birth and accounted for 78 and 76 respectively.
Other
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 two
nations
 were low 51 and 48.
In contrast
,
Canada
 was
the
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 highest position than
Japan
 which was daily
calories
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 supply per person, at 3326 and 2846 respectively.
Peru
 and Zarie had 1927 and 1749. Surprisingly,
Canada
 and
Japan
has
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 the same proportion of the adult literacy rate
accounted
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accounting
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 for 99 per cent
while
 68% of
Peru
 and 34% of Zarie.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nations, canada, japan, peru with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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