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in the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Due to
 the development of the internet and the spread of social
networks
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of
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people
 prefer catching news online as opposed to buying a newspaper.
Also
, there are many novels and articles available for seekers on various websites. Now, the question is
that
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whether
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printed newspapers or
books
 are going to extinct ,and whether in future everyone can access
to
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anything freely. my answer to both questions is no.
While
, nowadays, most of the
people
 have a mobile phone and follow news on social
medias
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,
such
 as X and Instagram, there exist individuals who still prefer getting news by reading
newspapre
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newspaper
newspapers
, because it is nostalgic for them.
Also
, some
people
 yet choose to read
books
, they might think that
books
 are
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easier to read and you can easily highlight a word that you do not want to forget.
In addition
, you can make some notes without any
troble
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trouble
.
Moreover
,
books
 are real papers ,and they can be touched and felt by readers. The smell of a fresh book is incomparable to anything. About the idea of accessing everything without paying money,
firstly
, in many countries you can not open
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 article or novel
instead
 of buying it,
otherwise
 you
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 as a criminal.
Secondly
, it is completely against the author's right,
for example
, in Iran because of lacking
surveilance
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surveillance
 most
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the
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people
 do that.
Finally
, it is not moral, since, there
are
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 a budget and effort behind
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books
, and those who want to use them must
to
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pay. All in all
,
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 demands
for
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books
 will
countinue
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continue
,so they are going to be compiled in future,
also
 accessing
to
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what ever
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whatever
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people
 want on
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the internet
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internet
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 is an impossible thing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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