The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.
The graph
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data regarding the figure
in
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every twelve
month
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of
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rentals
and
sales
of film from distinct
store
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stores
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between 2002 and 2011.
Overall
, the four
store
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saw unsimilar trend in the time period. The
rentals
and VHS
sales
experience
go
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down extremely,
while
DVD
sales
with
a
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some
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significant increase between 2002 and 2007 but after that
decrease
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slightly, the
Blue-ray
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sales
move
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up gradually but not over 50,000 number that sold. As the graphs
shows
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, the number of
rentals
saw a big down started at approximately 185,000 in 2002.
Then
, it fell slightly until it declined to just over 50,000 in 2011.
Afterward
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, the trend of VHS
sales
actually
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similar
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pattern with
Rentals
which started
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about 56,000 and ended
on
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10,000 in 2005.
Then
,
DVD
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for DVD
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sales
, between 2002-2007 the figure
move
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up
to
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from 58,000 and
land
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up 200,000. At a later time,
this
figure
subsequently
fell to about 190,000 in 2011.
By contrast
, the annual number of Blu-ray
sales
stood at a small climb that
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just
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over 0 and
end up
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ended
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at about 20,000
in
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between 2007 and 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rentals, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Rentals
  • Sales
  • Formats
  • VHS (Video Home System)
  • DVD (Digital Versatile Disc)
  • Blu-ray
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Rise
  • Market changes
  • Digital downloads
  • Physical formats
  • Over the years
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Impact
  • Technological advancements
  • Shift
  • Predictions
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