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The table shows the number of people (millions) that remain undernourished around the world from 2000 to 2009. The chart displays the global price of two food grains over the same period.

The table shows the number of people (millions) that remain undernourished around the world from 2000 to 2009. The chart displays the global price of two food grains over the same period.
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THE TABLE ILLUSTRATES THE NUMBER OF
PEOPLE
WITH
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MILLIONS
 THAT
STAY
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STAYED
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 UNDERNOURISHED ENTIRE THE WORLD IN 2000 AND 2009. THE LINE CHART DEMONSTRATES THE
PRICE
 OF GRAINS OVER THE SAME
YEARS
.
OVERALL
,
ALTHOUGH
 IT INCREASED SLIGHTLY IN
FIRST
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THE FIRST
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YEARS
, IT SKYROCKETED IN THE NUMBER OF
MILLIONS
 OF
PEOPLE
 DURING THE
LAST
 3
YEARS
.
FURTHERMORE
,
PRICES
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THE PRICES
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 OF WHEAT AND RICE
WAS
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PROVED TO BE THE SAME AMOUNT IN
FIRST
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THE FIRST
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 YEAR;
HOWEVER
,
PRICE
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THE PRICE
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 OF WHEAT EXPERIENCED MORE IN ALL
YEARS
 EXCEPT FOR 2006 AND HIT THE HIGHEST POINT IN
LAST
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THE LAST
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 YEAR. IN 2000, INDIVIDUALS CONSUMED LESS FOOD AND DRINK WITH 857000000 COMPARED WITH THE FOLLOWING
YEARS
. UNTIL 2006, THE NUMBER OF
PEOPLE
 WITH
MILLIONS
 ROSE MARGINALLY FROM 857000000 TO 876000000. THE MOST NOTEWORTHY SURGE WAS EXPERIENCED BETWEEN 2006 AND 2009 WHICH PEAKED
BY
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MILLIONS
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MILLION
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OF
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PEOPLE
. REGARDING THE LINE GRAPH,
PRICE
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THE PRICE
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 OF RICE SHOWED
FLUCTIATIONS
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FLUCTUATION
 IN
FIRST
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THE FIRST
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YEARS
 AND WAS RECORDED FOR 200
DOLLAR
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DOLLARS
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 PER TON IN 2000.
NEVERTHELESS
 IT SURGED TO 400 AND DIVED TO 300 DURING THE
FIRST
 6
YEARS
, IT SOARED FROM 300 TO 1150 OVER THE
LAST
 3
YEARS
 AND OCCUPIED THE TOPMOST PLACE. LOOKING AT THE
PRICE
 OF RICE,
IT
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WAS REGISTERED TO BE 200 WHICH WAS THE SAME
WITH
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 WHEAT. FROM 2000 TO 2004, REMAINED UNCHANGED AND
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BY
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 THE
YEARS
, IT JUMPED FROM 200 TO 900 DOLLARS.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, millions, price, years, first with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
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