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The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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This
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 line graph indicates various crimes.
In addition
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,
this
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 chart
also
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 demonstrates the
number
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 of cases
connection
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connected
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 over the period 1970 to 2005, in Wales and England. First of all, car theft was the most vital problem in 1970 in Wales and England. ( 0.40
million
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 ) The
number
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 of car theft
issue
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issues
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 reached a peak in 1995. Over the next 15 years, there was a significant decrease. ( From 1.60
million
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 to 1.00
million
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 ) In 1970, street robbery
has
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had
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 the smallest
number
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 when we compare
with
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it with
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 others. ( approximately 0 ) The
number
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 of street
robbery
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robberies
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 fluctuated during the period 1970 to 1990. It reached a maximum level in 2000. The figure
of
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for
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 the street robbery remained stable between 2000 and 2005. The
number
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 of house burgling was 0.20
million
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, in 1970. There was a
numerous
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large
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 growth between 1970 and 1980. ( From 0.20
million
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 to 0.60 ) It stayed constant during the period between 1980 and 1985. It reached a peak in 1990. ( 0.70
million
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 ) Between 1995 and 2005, the
number
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 of house burgling went down slightly ( From 0.70
million
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 to 0.90
million
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 )
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, there was a significant rise
for
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in
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each
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apply
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crime between 1970 and 2005.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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