The bar chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly salary

The bar chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly salary
The bar chart compares the allocation of
families
' weekly incomes to various types of
expenditure
between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
,
families
shifted their lion's share of outcomes from food in 1968, to leisure activities in 2018. In the baseline year,
families
' food expenses constitute 35% of their
overall
outcome
, dwarfing the other
expenditure
brackets by a significant margin.
Moreover
, the expense for housing is only a mere 10% of the total
outcome
,
this
differs greatly from households in 2018 that allocated a near 20% of the
outcome
only for housing.
Furthermore
, other types of
expenditure
were not significant to households in 1968, counting to less than 10 per cent of the total
outcome
, each. The consumption pattern drastically changed in 2018.
Families
are inclined to do various leisure activities, consuming almost 25% of their money.
Expenditure
on housing
also
increased in 2018 to almost 20%. Other expenditures
also
saw changes over the year, albeit marginally.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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