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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
There is no denying the fact that speaking complex concept.
While
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country
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 and they have to speak
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 many problems. There is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider
as well
as
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 practical issue.
To begin
 with, these problems depend specifically
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 the
people
.
In other words
, it is difficult for our community because they do not have
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enough knowledge to speak with different
language
.
In addition
, not all
people
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 and determination to start
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.
For example
,
according to
 statistics, the average of
of
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foreign
language
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make
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 many
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is approximately 15% which is
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 number. Another point to consider, speaking with native
language
 is crucial to
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 their skills. It is
also
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the
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different languages with someone
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will help them to
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speak with
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peope
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people
 in another village.
Moreover
, it will get more information if they continue to speak.
For instance
, making conversation with foreign
people
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will help them and support them
to achieve
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 their interview and presentation in
their
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futur
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future
. In conclusion, despite
people
 having a different view, I believe that speaking is
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, and should all
people
 realize its importance.
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Structure
Ensure clear introduction and conclusion sections are present. Your introduction should clearly state your opinion or answer to the question, while your conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your view in different words.
Structure
Use paragraphs to organize your essay clearly. Each paragraph should introduce a single main idea, supported by examples or explanations. Avoid mixing multiple ideas within a single paragraph.
Content
Work on providing specific and relevant examples to support your main points. Your examples should clearly relate to the topic and help reinforce your argument or perspective.
Content
Improve the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas by planning your essay before writing. Make sure each paragraph contributes to your overall argument or answer to the question.
Content
Focus on developing a logical structure for your essay. Start from introducing the topic, followed by presenting arguments for or against it, and conclude by summarizing your points and restating your standpoint.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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