The Graph Above Shows Information About Employment Rates Across 6 Countries in 1995 and 2005

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employment

emplyment

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employment

rates

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sex And 6 different countries in1995 and 2005

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.the sex different countries increased all rates in both

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rose quickly by 68 and 53

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in male 1995 and 2005

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decreased

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rapidly to around 40% and the

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in 1995 around 28% In

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the male increased to 82%in different

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type around 63 people in 1995 The

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and the USA were reminded

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rapidly to around 83 % and

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70 % in 1995

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decreased quickly to 52% and

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other 40% in 1995 In

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decreased slightly to 40% in 2005

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the female was a small one around 23%

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people

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