Task 1: The diagram below shows the proposed changes to an office building. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

Task 1: The diagram below shows the proposed changes to an office building.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Write at least 150 words
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The illustrations demonstrate the
offered
Verb problem
apply
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two variations
to
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of
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an
office
building.
Overall
, the first illustration represents a typical Japanese
office
, and all chairs and
desks
in the
office
are planned to
placed
Add a missing verb
be placed
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around
section
managers
'
desks
. The latter diagram shows a typical American
office
plan with
subdivision
Correct article usage
a subdivision
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of manager rooms on the right
side
and different facilities on the left
side
are planned to
divided
Add a missing verb
be divided
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from
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into
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chairs and
desks
. The first offer of a typical Japanese
office
is set to have
a windows
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a window
windows
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just behind the department manager's location. All chairs and
desks
will be placed in front of the
section
managers
' locations, and
therefore
,
section
managers
can keep in touch with 6
desks
during their
works
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work
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and meetings. The second proposed change to a former
office
building is a typical American
office
. In
this
suggestion, 8 L-shaped
desks
are set to located in the
center
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centre
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of the
office
and department manager and
section
managers
will be isolated from
desks
,
Wrong verb form
located
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locating
Wrong verb form
located
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on the right
side
of the
office
. Some facilities
such
as conference rooms, storage, and printer
copier
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copiers
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will be placed on the left
side
of the
office
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words office, desks, section, managers, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modernize
  • efficiency
  • utilize
  • facilities
  • proposed
  • key changes
  • existing
  • highlight
  • zones
  • implications
  • flow of movement
  • improved productivity
  • work environment
  • implementation
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