The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.
The bar chart and line graph illustrate the
number
of
participants
in the
Olympics
during
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1924, 1952, 1984 and 2012. In more detail, the bar chart compares the amount of female and male
participants
on
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the same period.
Overall
, the
number
of athletes
participate
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participating
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in the
Olympics
has significantly increased since it began. In 1924, there
was
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only about 3.000
participants
, but,
this
number
increased to about 5.000
participants
in 1952. The
number
of
participants
constantly increased in 1984 and 2012,
accounted
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for more than 6.000 and 11.000
participants
, respectively. Since it began, the
Olympics
has always been involving male and female athletes.
However
, there is a significant
grow
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of female
participants
in 2012 compared to 1924. In 1952, there
was
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were
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only less than 500 female
participants
in the
Olympics
. After 32 years, the
number
of female
participants
almost tripled,
accounted
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accounting
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for almost 1500
person
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people
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in 1984. The
number
of female athletes involved in
teh
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the
Olympics
peaked in 2012 with almost 5000
participants
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, participants, olympics with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Olympic Games
  • participants
  • historical context
  • trend
  • exponential growth
  • influence
  • world events
  • diversity
  • technological advancements
  • global
  • gender equality
  • International Olympic Committee (IOC)
  • unity
  • competition
  • athletes
  • entry
  • represent
  • delegation
  • boycotts
  • milestones
  • parity
  • inclusive
  • disciplines
  • legacy
  • sponsorship
  • admission
  • elite sportspeople
  • national pride
  • cultural exchange
  • ambassadors
  • sportsmanship
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