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“The table shows the average length of video advertisements on the internet and the average length of time viewers spend watching them. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.”

“The table shows the average length of video advertisements on the internet and the average length of time viewers spend watching them. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.”
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This
 table chart shows
that
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apply
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the average length of online
commercial
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commercials
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 and the watching time of viewers which
is
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are
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 divided into eleven categories
such
 as public service,
automotives
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automotive
, and so on.
Overall
, there seems to be
the
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a
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 positive correlation between the advertising length and the actual watching time with exceptions only in three parts which are entertainment, consumer electronics and other retail. Looking at the chart closely, it reveals that
although
 a variety of commercials lasted 22.4 seconds on average, people tend to view those content
only
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in only
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 10.7
second
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seconds
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 which is below
the
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half of those commercials.
Whereas public
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Public
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 service
was
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had
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 the longest content
of
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which length was 45.8 and
then
,
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and citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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also
watch
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watched
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 it the longest, clothing
advertisement
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advertisements
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 only took 14.6 seconds which was the shortest content and people had
tendency
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a tendency
the tendency
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 to look at other
retail - related
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retail-related
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 stuff only for 4.5 seconds. One of the noticeable parts is that viewers watched more than half of the whole story in the four categories including automotive, financial services, travel and home furnishings.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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