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The table below gives information about Salaries of Secondry / high school teachers in five countries .

The table below gives information about Salaries of Secondry / high school teachers in five countries .
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The table below illustrates the numbers of salaries of school teachers in certain countries.
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,it is evident that the amount of salary for teachers in Luxemburg was the
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 one and the lowest one was from Australia. To commence with
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European countries, which are Luxemburg and Denmark have considerable differences
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 each other.
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 the starting salary made up 47,000 and after 15 years it accounted for 54,000,respectively.
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Luxembourg showed the biggest numbers
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,which comprised 80,000
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 point and 112,000 after 15 years,
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. When it comes to Asian countries, which are Korea and Japan.There were gradual differences between those places,
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the
 starting salary for teachers in Korea accounted for 30,500 and 52,600,
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 salaries in Japan made up 28,000 and 49,000 after 15 years , respectively. It may be concluded from the table that Luxembourg showed the biggest numbers and Australia had the opposite trend.
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