The table below gives information about Salaries of Secondry / high school teachers in five countries .

The table below gives information about Salaries of Secondry / high school teachers in five countries .
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salary
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salaries
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of secondary and high school
teachers
in five different
countries
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, in the table Australia,Denmark,Luxembourg,Korea and Japan are given. But in all the
countries
the salaries are different from each other. First of all, the salary of
the
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teachers
in all
the
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countries
is at a high point, the government takes care of the
teachers
. The first
country
is Australia and the starting pay is 34,600 dollars a
year
, after 15
years
it will rise to 48,000.
Other
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country
is Denmark and it has the second most earning
country
a
year
. It gives 47,000 and the max is 54,000 that you will earn after working 8
years
.
Moreover
, the most paid
country
for
teachers
is Luxembourg in a
year
80,000 given,
in addition
after 15
years
112,000 will be given. In other
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case
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Kore is providing 30,500 to their
teachers
and after working 37
years
the salary increases to 84,500.
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the
last
country
is Japan and has the least earning out of
five
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countries
. In one
year
28,000
in
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given and after 15
years
49,000 is offered.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, countries, country, year, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
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