You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Questions: 1.Explain why you want to take time off work 2.Give details of the amount of time you need 3.Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to enquire about taking some time off my business. I would be
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if you could allow me some time off my work. Because
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today is my mother's birthday. So I need a lot of duration to celebrate her birthday. First of all, I have to book into a restaurant near the beach. Usually, restaurants
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busy in the evening. We are going to try
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Italian fish restaurant on the seafront. They do really good food at that place and it is not very expensive either.
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, I have to buy a mesmerizing dress for my mommy. Because my mom deserves expensive presents.
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, I would like to make party cakes for my queen. I suggest
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you could give me
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time off my work I will labour out of my work tomorrow. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Po‘latova Parizoda.
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task achievement
Address the question more precisely by directly responding to all the given points. Instead of general statements, clearly explain why you require time off, specifying the amount of time you need and how your work could be covered.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by organizing information more appropriately. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas and ensure a smooth flow from the introduction to the body and then the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Provide a clearer and direct conclusion. Summarize your points briefly and restate your request in a way that clearly indicates your expectation for a response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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