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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart given represents the amount of newspaper magazines bought by a person in a few different countries between the years 2003 and 2005 with predicted
sales
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 for 2007. The most
sales
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 per person was 50 in
Country
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 B in 2003 and the smallest amount was around 4 in
Country
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 E in 2003. By far,
Country
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 B has the most amount of paper sold judging by both 2003 and 2005. The predicted
sales
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 are
also
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 pretty high. Around 43 to be precise.
On the other hand
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, there is
Country
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 D
as well as
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Country
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 E who don’t manage to sell as many articles as three other countries.
Although
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,
Country
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 D has an increasing trend including its projected
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, it still doesn’t come close to
Country
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 A, B or C
due to
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 the numbers they produce.
Country
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 A
also
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 has a sort of declining trend with its
sales
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 being 48 in 2003 and going downward until 37 which is a forecast.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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