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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table that
were
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was
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 observed shows data about how the UK unemployed spent their time
last
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 year. The data was first categorized into 4 main groups, which
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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morning men, morning women,
afternoon
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 men, and
afternoon
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 women.
Furthermore
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, there were 15 different activities that were observed,
whereas
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 the table ranked them by the highest percentage, which was housework, to the lowest percentage, which was drinking.
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, the highest percentage of how the unemployed spent their time went to housework done by morning women, with approximately 49 %.
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, the lowest went to staying in bed and playing sports, both done by the
afternoon
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 female, with zero per cent. Another noteworthy aspect that was observed was the biggest gap in the highest category, which was housework,
went
Correct pronoun usage
which went
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 to the morning female with the
afternoon
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 gentleman, with approximately a 42% difference.
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, the
afternoon
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 men held the first position in several categories, which were TV, walking, nothing/sitting around, and drinking.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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