some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Today, advertising is an integral part of our modern life.
Although
there are some argue
that advertising Correct pronoun usage
who argue
is persuaded
us to purchase goods, Wrong verb form
persuades
other
believe that it is not attractive in Fix the agreement mistake
others
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the long-term
long-term
. In point of my view, advertising can help us to make a better decision for choosing our needs, Correct your spelling
long term
however
, time
to time Change preposition
from time
advertiser
may stray Fix the agreement mistake
advertisers
they
way. Correct pronoun usage
their
This
essay will discuss both sides.
Companies advertise their product in public to enchanting
customers to buy their Wrong verb form
enchant
products
. The one
way how they do Correct article usage
One
that is
using
social media like Instagram, YouTube and so on. Change preposition
by using
This
way would be beneficial especially Change preposition
in
for
our modern life Change preposition
in
that
most of us are struggling with a Correct pronoun usage
apply
sedentary-jobs
. I mean most of us have to sit on Correct your spelling
jobs
Add an article
a chair
the chair
chair
for hours and do not have Fix the agreement mistake
chairs
for
surround shopping. So, it will Change preposition
to
helpful
to Add a missing verb
be helpful
searching
on the sites and find whatever we want or even Change the form of the verb
search
will
familiar with some Verb problem
be
products
and services suddenly when we are watching a movie or a video on YouTube by
just one click. We can Change preposition
with
also
compare them in a
just minutes and be aware Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
about
their benefits and drawbacks and Change the preposition
of
finally
select on
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one
Correct pronoun usage
that meet
meet
our needs at a reasonable price.
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meets
However
, by
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with
spread
of social media Add an article
the spread
this
type of advertising has become more popular, some people believe that they are so annoying particularly when they played
frequently. Wrong verb form
play
For instance
, today YouTube use as an online school and people in particular
young people use it to learn some courses. It will be distracted
and lead to Wrong verb form
distracting
lose
track of their studying when they need to be more Change the verb form
losing
concentration
. It is vital that advertisers provide a situation Replace the word
concentrated
that
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where
viewer
have the right to choose when they do not need to watch. Some of them are Fix the agreement mistake
viewers
also
so tricky just to channel viewers to choose purchase
Fix the infinitive
to purchase
products
that we do not need or are not very essential or even are
harmful. Because some Unnecessary verb
apply
them
are considered about their benefits and just want to sell their Change preposition
of them
products
. To mitigate these downsides that
some of which may be inventible, some regulations are needed to check their validity.
In conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
apply
however
, the importance of advertising is undeniable our
life to have intelligent Change preposition
in our
choice
, sometimes they are distracting. I believe that Fix the agreement mistake
choices
imposing
some new Change preposition
by imposing
rule
by authorities and Fix the agreement mistake
rules
provide
some solutions to reduce demerits of advertising like providing Wrong verb form
providing
possibility
of skipping them when they are Add an article
the possibility
unnecessarily
we can Change the word
unnecessary
use
take advantage of Verb problem
apply
adverting
toward having awareness and knowledge about everything we going to buy.Verb problem
advertising
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure every paragraph focuses on a single main idea and provide clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
Use more precise and complex vocabulary to strengthen your argument and convey your ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Check your essay for grammatical errors and try to use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures.
Task Response
Develop your arguments with more specific examples and explanations to fully answer the question.
Task Response
You've nicely balanced the discussion by addressing both sides of the argument and giving your own opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
You utilized a clear structure in your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task Response
You effectively use examples to support your points, such as the use of YouTube for learning and the distractions caused by ads.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.
