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The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the data concerning the employment of
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 and French
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teachers
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 over a six-year period in Ontario from 2001 to 2007. It can be seen, that the consistent descending trend in the recruitment of French and
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language
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teachers
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 was sharply changed by an increase in French
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teachers
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 in 2002,
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 the employment of
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language
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teachers
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 went down for an additional year. It is noticeable that the decreasing trend of hiring
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language
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teachers
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 is evident so that the highest point occurred at the beginning of the period and the lowest portion was approximately 28
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percent
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 in 2007. The chart
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 that the hiring of French
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teachers
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 fluctuated around 70
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 from 2003 to 2006 and peaked at circa 75
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 in 2007. In 2001 and 2002, both recruitment rates experienced the same proportions at around 72
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 and 57
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percent
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, respectively.
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, in 2007, French
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teachers
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 were hired more than twice in comparison to the rate of the other group.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words english, language, teachers, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • steady increase
  • growing demand
  • notable decline
  • budget cuts
  • student enrollment
  • temporary stabilization
  • policy adjustments
  • economic improvements
  • post-2005
  • long-term educational strategies
  • recruitment needs
  • budgetary restraints
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