The graph below show the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

The graph below show the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007
The line graph provides the three spreads, which are Margarine,
Low fat
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and reduced spreads and butter that were consumed within 26
years
.
Overall
, three of them increased. As can be seen, in 1981, Butter started at the highest position which consumed approximately 142
Grams
then
went up
around
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158
grams
in the next five
years
. before it dropped gradually until the end of the period. The same trend was true as Margarine began at around 87
grams
in the first year, which was 1981 and it fluctuated in the next century. After that in the next five
years
, the Margarine remained steady at 100
grams
before falling dramatically around about 67
grams
in the next following
years
.
On the contrary
, low fat and reduced spreads stood at the lowest position at about 10
gram
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grams
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in 1996 and it went up
around
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82
grams
in 2001 and it witnessed
decreased
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till the end of the periods
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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