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You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter: •Explain why you want to do the voluntary work. •State what your skills and experience are. •Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long

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Dear Sir or
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, I hope
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 letter finds you well My name is Gulsevar Keldiyarova, and I am writing to express my interest in participating in one of your volunteer programs focused on contributing to communities in developing countries. The primary reason behind my desire to engage in voluntary work is the profound belief in the impact individuals can make by contributing their time and skills to communities in need. I am passionate about fostering positive change and believe that volunteering provides a unique opportunity to directly contribute to the betterment of society. I bring to the table a diverse set of skills and experiences that I believe can be valuable in a volunteer setting. With a background
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 possess strong, which I am eager to apply to projects that align with your organization's mission.
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, my previous experiences in [mention relevant experiences] have equipped me with adaptability and cross-cultural communication skills, essential for working in diverse environments. In terms of location, I am particularly interested in volunteering
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the volunteer work, ensuring a meaningful and sustained contribution to the community. I am impressed by Cultural
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 commitment to meaningful and sustainable projects and I believe that your organization would provide the ideal platform for me to make
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 impact. I would greatly appreciate any information regarding the available opportunities and the application process. Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to the possibility
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 to the transformative work your organization undertakes. Sincerely, Gulsevar Keldiyarova
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task achievement
Ensure clarity in expressing your skills and experience. The section on skills and experience lacks specific information, weakening the response. Elaborate on your background and how exactly it aligns with the needs of volunteer work.
task achievement
Include specific examples of past volunteer work or relevant experiences. This not only strengthens your task achievement but also adds depth to your letter.
coherence cohesion
Enhance logical structure by elaborating on your reason for a specific location preference. Detailing why you want to volunteer in a particular location would enhance coherence and provide a clearer understanding of your motivations.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to minor typographical errors and ensure proper punctuation and capitalization. For instance, 'Dear Sir or madam,' should have 'Madam' capitalized.
coherence cohesion
For a more personalized and engaging letter, consider addressing a specific person or department at Cultural Expeditions if possible. This contributes to a more professional tone and presentation.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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