You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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These days, some people say that shopping in different countries
are
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becoming more similar when there
is
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are
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less
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fewer
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different
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differences
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in
products
around the world. Some people think
this
cause
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negative effects,
while
the
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others do not agree with that opinion. I believe
this
is
such
a bad development, and in
this
essay, I will talk about my opinion and provide my own
evidences
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evidence
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. First of all, I think that modern
malls
around the world are replacing the traditional markets. To compare, a market
often
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bigger than a mall, which
take
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more time to
shopping
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shop
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around and
make
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makes
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it less convenient than
malls
.
This
lead
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to the fact that youngsters prefer the
malls
because it help them save their time.
This
situation caused
the
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decrease in
number
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of local stores and conventional markets, which
is
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the main
source
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sources
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that provide local
products
and improve the variety of choices for customers.
For example
, in my city, the old Bien Hoa market
are
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is
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having a decrease in
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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of sellers, because of the
dominant
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dominance
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of new
malls
.
Secondly
, the poor variety of
products
means local supplies are being underrated
than
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imported resources. Just imagine that you have your own garden that
produce
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every kind of
vegetables
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vegetable
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that you need for your daily needs, but you still decide to buy that same kind of vegetable from an outside store, which is probably a waste of time and money.
For example
,
according to
a
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apply
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research on 5,000 people from Ho Chi Minh
city
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City
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, 76% of them say that they prefer imported foods and appliances because they believe
foreigners
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foreign
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products
have higher quality.
To conclude
, my opinion is customers
can
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buying the same
products
worldwide is an unpositive change, because it
lower
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lowers
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the profit of conventional local stores and supplies.
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task response
Focus on clearly presenting your opinion in the introduction and reiterating it in the conclusion for stronger impact.
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Ensure your essay introduction clearly states your stance on the topic for clarity from the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Work on developing a clear logical structure that guides the reader through your arguments with clear paragraphing.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with specific examples or further explanation to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Improve spelling, grammar, and word choice for higher coherence and to better convey your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Multinational corporations
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Globalization
  • Local traditions
  • E-commerce platforms
  • Global culture
  • Hyper-connectivity
  • Environmental impact
  • Climate change
  • Consumer choices
  • Economic drawbacks
  • Global market
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainable practices
  • Cross-cultural understanding
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