Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a healthy and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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old
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generation
life more
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longer
live
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because they eat more
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food and they work
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as a
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family
, but some
of
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individuals believe that a
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diet
as well
exercise
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as exercise
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are not necessary for general
well being
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and living long. In my
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is not
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. In
this
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i
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will discuss how
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is a balance healthy
dieat
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diet
and
mantaince
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maintain
exercise
. To start with, having a proper
body
diet
can help
body
mechanisms
proplerly
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properly
. As we know,
body
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need
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such
as
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labour
, vitamin
c
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,
firber
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fibre
and
other
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others
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. If a
person
take
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proper
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the proper
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amount
what
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body
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need
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its
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help
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helps
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body
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function and can
prevence
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prevent
from
disease
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such
as
diabities
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diabetes
, blood high
preaseure
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pressure
and more. A good
diet
aslo
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also
can
prevance
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from having
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overweight
body
or
underweight
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.
Secondly
,
maintaince
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maintaining
a
schedual
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schedule
exercise
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of exercise
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can help
body
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mantaince
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maintain
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function accurately. Having a
schedual
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scheduled
exercise
not only
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body
mantaince
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maintenance
funtion
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function
, but
also
help
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helps
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body
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increace
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increase
blood circulation and
improve
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improves
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iminume
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body
.
Hence
, daily
exercise
also
can
prevence
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prevent
from diseace. As we all know, a
scheadual
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schedule
exercise
can help
body
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not only
fits
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, and
also
can make a
person
look
more
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younger.
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is not only
benefits
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for
health
but
also
help
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helps
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to become
more
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actractive
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attractive
person
. In conclusion, A good
balance
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balanced
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diet
and
a scheadual
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schedule
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exercises
is
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are
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good for
body
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and
health
. Not only can help
prevence
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prevent
from
diseace
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disease
but
also
can help increase
body
imunime
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immune
syestem
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system
. I believe having
a
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good
health
is
they
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the
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key
of
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to
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happines
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happiness
. We should
incouarge
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encourage
people to become
more healthy
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healthier
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person
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people
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to
life
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live
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more
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apply
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longer like our
old
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older
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generation.
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