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The table below shows infirmation about spendings on items in some countries in 2002.

The table below shows infirmation about spendings on items in some countries in 2002.
#infirmation #spendings #items #countries
The table gives the ratio of the consumption of three different
quaters
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quarters
 in the year 2002. The countries
such
 as Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey are the cases in point into which looked and measured.
Overall
,
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a compairison
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compairison
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comparison
 of these
subject
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subjects
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 of
spendings
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spending
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 clearly shows that the usage of food, drink, and
tobbaco
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tobacco
 was significantly more
that
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than
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others
as well as
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the
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leisure and
the
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education. First and Foremost,
utlizing
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utilizing
 the food, drink, and tobacco was of the most
spended
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depended
 on items. Despite the fact that
that
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in each country
this
 percentage was above the
others
, Turkey and Ireland substantially were much more than
others
 by the ratio of 32.14% and 28.91%.
However
, the number of
this
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data
 for the
others
were
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was
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 under 20% .
In contrast
, investment
foe
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for
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 leisure and education in all
off
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 the mentioned countries were gradually
in
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at
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 lower levels.
Amoung
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Among
 them,
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Spain consumed
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only 1.98% which was the lowest. Despite the fact that the amount of use in
this
 group
are
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is
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 not much
vary
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, Turkish people spent
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a grearter
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grearter
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greater
great
 deal on
the
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leisure and
the
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educatuin compaied
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education compared
 to
others
 by the number of 4.35%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words others with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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