Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon
Dear Mohit,
I am writing
this
letter to thanking
you for coming to my birthday Change the verb form
thank
part
and Correct your spelling
party
make
it so special for me by giving Wrong verb form
making
such
Correct pronoun usage
me such
a
expensive gift. I really appreciate it that I just gave you Change the article
an
call
that I am organizing a birthday party at my house and I Correct article usage
a call
am surprise
that you came on time even with my short notice. You proved Change the verb form
am surprised
it
that we are true friends Correct pronoun usage
apply
or
we do not need any formalities to do.
I liked your present which is Apple Watch. I am thinking Correct word choice
and
to buy
it but you gave me a surprise with it. I am facing difficulties Change preposition
of buying
to use
Change the verb form
using
phone
Add an article
the phone
a phone
in
every task. Now, Change preposition
for
this
watch will help me a lot because through this
I can do small things like read messages and pick calls
even without checking my phone. You know that I am Change preposition
up calls
manager
Correct article usage
the manager
in
Change preposition
of
accounts
department and I have a lot of pressure Add an article
the accounts
of
my work. Change preposition
from
This
will decrease my work little
bit and keep me updated Add an article
a little
time
to time. I do not have to worry about Change preposition
from time
phone
now.
I Correct pronoun usage
my phone
also
want to invite you on
my sister's marriage party which is on March 3,2024. We will Change preposition
to
then
sit together and have
Unnecessary verb
apply
a
gossip Remove the article
apply
on
our special moments and Change preposition
about
also
enjoy the party. Once again. Thank you so much for such
a beautiful present.
With regards,
RohitSubmitted by Kamaljeetkaur6968 on
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coherence cohesion
Focus on structuring your letter more clearly, ensuring there is a logical flow from one paragraph to the next. Introduce each idea with a clear topic sentence and support it with relevant details. Transition words can also help enhance the cohesion between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Though the greeting and closing are used appropriately in informal letters, ensure that the opening sentence is correctly structured. Use 'I am writing this letter to thank you' instead of 'I am writing this letter to thanking you'. Addressing this will help refine your greetings and closings further.
task achievement
You’ve responded well to the task by thanking your friend, explaining the usefulness of the gift, and suggesting a future meeting. To improve, provide more specific details or examples when discussing how the present is useful and clarify your plans for meeting up, offering options or a proposed activity.
task achievement
Maintain an informal but respectful tone throughout your letter, as is suitable for writing to a friend. Watch out for informal expressions or overly casual language that might not be appropriate even in this context, ensuring a balance between friendliness and respect.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.