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The graphs below show where people first got their news, both about the world and about local events, between 1987 and 1997.

The graphs below show where people first got their news, both about the world and about local events, between 1987 and 1997.
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The line graph gives information about the number of traditional news in
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 Kingdom between 1987 and 1997.
The
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 first six
years
 there has been a downfall towards traditional
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newspapers
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 and the rise of
television
.
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, it can be clearly seen that
teconogloy
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technology
 advancement would rise over
traditional
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the traditional
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source
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 of entertainment. First of all, the line graph shows a decrease
through out
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throughout
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 the 3
years
 especially in newspapers. Starting with 56% it has fallen to
approximenly
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approximately
 40% which shows a big jump
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throughout
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 the
years
.
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Television
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 off
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 19% it has a constant development and has reached approximately 27%
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 3
years
. Radio has a constant growth
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starting
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 off with 12% and ended with approximately 13% to 15%.
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 the
years
 1989 to 1993 there
has
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 been various changes in the usage of local news.
Newspaper
 has reached an
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 low with 40% usage.
On the other
hand
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television
has
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made
a the
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 biggest jump from 1992 to 1993 with
more
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a more
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 than
20
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a 20
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% increase. Radio has
remain
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 constant
though
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through
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 out these
years
. Reaching the final sector of the line graph
Newspaper
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Newspapers
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 and
television
 are on par with 40%
with
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of
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and 37%
with
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the
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television
. Radio
remain
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 unchanged since the start with 11% by the year 1997.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, newspaper, television with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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