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Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 contemporary world, donating a certain
amount
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 of money to charitable trusts become common. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the statement because mandating a fixed
amount
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 for everyone will be seen as an infringement of their privacy and
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 process will lose its value
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 external compulsion. The primary reason is, that people do not have a steady income and most of them are dependent on daily wages.
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 the lack of unemployment in society, youngsters are running behind jobs to help their families and in
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cases
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this
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 will cause distress and no one should intervene in their financial situations.
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, In some parts of India, workers get their payments delayed and in
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 cases, fixed payments perhaps get missed.
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, making
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 amendments will not definitely suit them. The second main reason to avoid mandating the target
amount
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 for charitable organisations is, that
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 compulsion changes the positive mindset of the persons who are ready to provide support and help the nation.
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, sometimes people have to spend
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 sum
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 their families in case of any medical emergencies and unexpected educational expenses which will result in missing the deadline.
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, Forcing someone to provide charity in
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 kind of situation will change their mindset towards their handout for non-profit organisations. In conclusion, I wholeheartedly disagree with the compulsion of donations to charitable institutions because it apparently affects the individual's financial circumstances and modifies the nature of embracing the philanthropy act.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic equality
  • Wealth gap
  • Redistributing resources
  • Social responsibility
  • Mandatory donations
  • Financial strain
  • Voluntary donations
  • Morality
  • Ethics
  • Efficient use of resources
  • Sporadic contributions
  • Implementation challenges
  • Compliance
  • Fixed amount
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