The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the chart shows the

inforfamtion

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information

about how many people visited

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apply

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three

london

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London

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meseums

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museums

museum

during

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between

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2007 and 2012.

overall

, at

first

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the first

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of the

period

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the

number

of people who visited

national

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the national

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gallery

wast

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was

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around 7

millions

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million

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and

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the victoria

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victoria

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and

albert

museum

had

highest

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number

of visitors almost 13

million

, in 2012 the numbers

have

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changed , the rate of

victoria

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and

albert

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saw

downward

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a downward

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trend and decreased to 10

million

andthe

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and the

rate of

indivisuals

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individuals

who visited

national

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the national

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gallery

increase

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increased

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significantly

approximately

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by approximately

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million

. regarding the

biritish

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British

museum

, it saw

upward

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an upward

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and downward trend during

this

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these

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years,it started from nearly 12

millions

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million

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visitors and decreased remarkably to around 6

millions

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million

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and again

rised

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rose

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notably to almost 15

millioms

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million

millions

in 2012. in conclusion,

although

form

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from

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the first and the end of

period

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the period

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national

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National Gallery

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gallery

and

victoria

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and

albert

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Albert Museum

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museum

had significant

change

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changes

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, in order the

number

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gallery have

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galleries

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increased

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by 10

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million

and

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the victoria

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victoria

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and

albert

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Albert

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museum

have

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apply

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decreased

almost

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by almost

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million

biritish

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British

museum

has

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not

changed

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much and remains almost in the same

number

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, gallery, victoria, albert, museum, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
45Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

176 words

6.50

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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