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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compararions where releavant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compararions where releavant.
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The diagram illustrates the difference in the spending of the families' income in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, the citizens spent most of their salary on Food in 1958
whereas
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 leisure items gained the highest proportion of their wages in 2018. In terms of the highest amount of spending, food shared 35% in 1968
while
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 leisure activities gained just more than 20% in 2018.
On the other hand
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, residents used the least in the category of fuel and power in both 1968 and 2018 with
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 of less than 5% and just more than 5% respectively. In detail, the food indicated the greatest change in the ratio as it plummeted from 35% to just more than 20%.
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, household goods did not have any change in the proportion.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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