The bar chart below shows the number of research students studying different subject in 2005.
The given bar graph illustrates different subjects (Linguistics, psychology, natural science, engineering, programming, and mathematics) studied by
research
students of different gender
during the year 2005.
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genders
Overall
, mostly all the fields of research
were dominated by men. However
, Natural sciences was the most popular research
study for both the
genders. Mathematics was the least popular field of study among Correct article usage
apply
female
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females
while
linguistics was for
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among
the
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male
.
In terms of linguistics, more than 100 women were enrolled Fix the agreement mistake
males
while
the number of men was well under 100. In contrast
, natural sciences was the only field of study where male and female students were equal i.e. 200. Furthermore
, psychology was also
another research
where 200 males and approximately 175 females were interested.
Engineering and programming had same
number of males i.e. 150 Change the article
a same
the same
while
the number of females were
around 80 and 65 respectively. Mathematics had considerably Change the verb form
was
less
than 50 women Correct quantifier usage
fewer
whereas
the proportion of men were
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was
sky rocketing
.Correct your spelling
skyrocketing
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