The bar chart below shows the number of research students studying different subject in 2005.

The bar chart below shows the number of research students studying different subject in 2005.
The given bar graph illustrates different subjects (Linguistics, psychology, natural science, engineering, programming, and mathematics) studied by
research
students of different
gender
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genders
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during the year 2005.
Overall
, mostly all the fields of
research
were dominated by men.
However
, Natural sciences was the most popular
research
study for both
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genders. Mathematics was the least popular field of study among
female
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females
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while
linguistics was
for
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the
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male
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. In terms of linguistics, more than 100 women were enrolled
while
the number of men was well under 100.
In contrast
, natural sciences was the only field of study where male and female students were equal i.e. 200.
Furthermore
, psychology was
also
another
research
where 200 males and approximately 175 females were interested. Engineering and programming had
same
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number of males i.e. 150
while
the number of females
were
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around 80 and 65 respectively. Mathematics had considerably
less
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than 50 women
whereas
the proportion of men
were
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sky rocketing
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.
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