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Band 6

You are visiting a town where you once worked.Write to a friend you worked with there.Include the following in your letter: Tell your friend about your life now Give him/her details of your visit Arrange how you can meet.

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Dear Khole, How have you been? Hope you and your family are doing great. Well, I am writing
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 email to you to arrange a meeting for us, if possible.
Although
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction Although. Consider removing the comma.

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 it has been 3 years now, still I have very clear memories of a time when you and I worked together at school as teachers. Nowadays, every person has a very hectic schedule and I am no exception, guessing
same
Correct article usage
the same

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 as you,I am very busy these days managing the 4 schools that I own now. Recently, my parents have come to New York to visit me.
Therefore
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I decided to spare some time for them, to show them the beautiful places around
city
Add an article
the city

The noun phrase city seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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. I am planning to
held
Change the verb
hold

It appears that the verb held should be in the base form as part of the to-infinitive following planning. Consider changing the verb form.

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 our trip towards Tashkent
very
Correct article usage
the very

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 next day. Fortunately, I am getting a chance to meet my best colleague once again and I don't want to miss
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 flight at any cost.
Hence
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, we can arrange breakfast with you in
restaurant
Add an article
a restaurant
the restaurant

The noun phrase restaurant seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 on April
,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have incorrectly used a comma with a date. Consider removing the comma.

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3, 2024, you can meet my parents as well. We all are excited to see you, especially me. Looking forward to hearing from you. Jasmina.

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Task Achievement
For Task Response, you have done well in addressing all the points required by the prompt. However, you could enhance your score by adding more details about your life now and perhaps explaining more about your work or personal achievements since leaving the town. This would provide a fuller picture to your friend.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve Coherence and Cohesion, consider adding more transitional phrases or words between sentences and paragraphs to better guide the reader through your ideas. While the overall structure is good, smoother transitions would enhance the flow of information and make your letter even more readable.
Tone & Register
Remember to maintain a balance between informal and respectful tone when writing to a friend. You've generally managed this well, but ensuring a consistent tone throughout can further improve the letter. Avoid overly formal words or phrases that might feel out of place in a friendly letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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