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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It can not be argued that consequences are created in the environment.
Although
 some
people
 reckon that it should resolve the problem worldwide other criticizes it and concede that it can be well-managed within nations. I will discuss both views in detail in the forthcoming paragraphs. Highlighting the first aspect,
people
 support the idea of a reduction in carbon emissions from vehicles as they believe it is beneficial in terms of pollution being decreased in
nature
.
Moreover
, it would not be wrong to say that plastic wastes and drainage water are flowing in the rivers or canals. To elaborate an epitome most factories are spreading smoke.
This
 can be considered as the environment is regularly disturbed by pollution. Shifting to another aspect, another school of thought opposite the concept of better to deal in countries as some
people
 think
Nature
 must be cleaned all over the world The factor which strengthens the view is awareness about the pollution and waste management is a necessity in the daily life and
this
 cannot be ignored.
Additionally
, The trees must be grown by the public to save
nature
. after pondering over
this
, I conclude that the public believes that risk in
nature
 should be managed globally but others it deal with in their countries. In my point of view, all
people
 have a responsibility to save the
nature
 and the society must be cleaned.
For instance
, if a community controls carbon emissions,
then
 it leads to maintaining natural gases that are produced by forests. After pondering over
this
, I conclude that the public believes that risk in
nature
 should be managed globally but others it deal with in their countries. In my point of view, all
people
 have a responsibility to save the
nature
 and the society must be cleaned.
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Logical Structure
Ensure clear, distinct paragraphs each focusing on a specific argument or point. Organize your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each viewpoint, and a conclusion that summarizes and restates your opinion.
Introduction & Conclusion
In the introduction and conclusion, clearly state the essay topic and your opinion. Make sure the conclusion summarizes the points discussed and reiterates your standpoint.
Supported Main Points
Support your main points with specific examples and explanations. Avoid generalized or vague statements by providing concrete examples or data to back up your arguments.
Complete Response
Address the task directly and ensure your essay comprehensively deals with all parts of the task. Clearly discuss both views and your own opinion, providing arguments and examples for each.
Clear & Comprehensive Ideas
Develop your ideas fully for a clear and comprehensive understanding of each point. Break down your arguments into more detailed explanations to enhance clarity.
Relevant & Specific Examples
Incorporate more specific examples and data relevant to the topic. Use real-world situations, studies, or hypothetical scenarios to strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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