The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park 

Secondary School since its construction in 1950
The maps illustrate how
West
Park
Secondary
School
changed over a 60-year period from 1950 to 2010. Generally,
it is clear that
the
West
Park
Secondary
School
experienced
striking
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a striking
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transformation. Most noticeably, the increases in
car
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the car
a car
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park
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parks
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and
school
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schools
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(main building), the elimination of the houses and the farmland,
the
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and the
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area of ​​sports fields and playgrounds
has
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been reduced. The
school
(main building) was
it
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apply
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located in the
south east
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southeast
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of the
park
remained unchanged
overtime
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over time
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. The playground was situated in the
south east
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south-east
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stayed unchanged but it has been scaled back. Add to that the appearance
a
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of a
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sports field. The location of
main
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the main
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road remained after 60 years. The houses and farmland
was
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were
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situated in the
south
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southwest
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west
of the town removed to make way for the development of a car
park
,
a
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and a
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sports field with a science block from 1950 to 1980, and to 2010 the car
park
, the science block continues to be expanded,
whereas
the
sport
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sports
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field in the
south
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south-west
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west
there is a change of position.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.

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