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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The two maps demonstrate the transformation of a small,
uninhabitat
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uninhabited
island
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 before and after the construction of tourist facilities.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
island
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 underwent significant development, transforming from
natural
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a natural
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 environment into a modern tourist resort. Despite these extensive changes, the natural features of the
island
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,
such
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 as the beach and the majority of trees, were
large
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largely
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 preserved. Looking at the details, the central and western parts of the
island
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 were heavily
progress
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developed
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 to accommodate visitors. A total of fifteen accommodation huts were built. Six of them are constructed
in
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on
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 the western side of the area,
while
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 nine huts are settled
in
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on
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 the eastern side. A large restaurant was positioned to the north of these central structures, and a reception building was replaced directly south of
restaurant
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the restaurant
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, encircled by a vehicle track.
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, a new pier was built on the southern coast, allowing boats and yachts to dock.
This
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 pier is connected to the reception by a vehicle track. An extensive network of footpaths was introduced, linking all the accommodation huts to each other. The eastern part of the
island
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 remained completely undeveloped and free of any construction.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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