the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. write at least 150 words.

the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. write at least 150 words.
The given map depicts the
two
proposed locations of a novel
super market
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supermarket
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, which
planned
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is planned
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to be situated in Garlsdon town. From an
overall
perspective, the difference between the
two
sites, as it is clearly seen
in
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on
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the map, is that S1 will be located in the rural zone, meanwhile, S2 will be erected
to be
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in the town centre.
To begin
with, the first possible
site
will be in the
north-west
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northwest
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of the town, which will be near Hindon city about 12
kilometer
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with a population of 10,000.
This
predicted
site
will be far away from the residential area, but almost next to the industrial zone.
Moreover
, the
site
will be reached either by train or main road.
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contrast, the second proposed location is projected to be inside the city center. The industrial area will surround it, and the residential zones will be situated both one in the north, and the next would be in the south.
Besides
, the
two
ways of transport are possible, yet the railway is going to be better.
In addition
, S2 is going to be a good
site
as it is going to
near
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the
two
cities called Cransdon and Bransdon.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, site with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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