IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. write at least 150 words.

the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. write at least 150 words.
#town #galsdon #supermarket #two #sites
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given map depicts the
two
Use synonyms
 proposed locations of a novel
super market
Correct your spelling
supermarket
show examples
, which
planned
Add a missing verb
is planned
show examples
 to be situated in Garlsdon town. From an
overall
Linking Words
 perspective, the difference between the
two
Use synonyms
 sites, as it is clearly seen
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the map, is that S1 will be located in the rural zone, meanwhile, S2 will be erected
to be
Verb problem
apply
show examples
in the town centre.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, the first possible
site
Use synonyms
 will be in the
north-west
Correct your spelling
northwest
show examples
 of the town, which will be near Hindon city about 12
kilometer
Change to a plural noun
kilometers
show examples
 with a population of 10,000.
This
Linking Words
 predicted
site
Use synonyms
 will be far away from the residential area, but almost next to the industrial zone.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the
site
Use synonyms
 will be reached either by train or main road.
To
Change preposition
In
show examples
 contrast, the second proposed location is projected to be inside the city center. The industrial area will surround it, and the residential zones will be situated both one in the north, and the next would be in the south.
Besides
Linking Words
, the
two
Use synonyms
 ways of transport are possible, yet the railway is going to be better.
In addition
Linking Words
, S2 is going to be a good
site
Use synonyms
 as it is going to
near
Add a missing verb
be near
show examples
 the
two
Use synonyms
 cities called Cransdon and Bransdon.
Submitted by f201600285 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, site with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: