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The table below shows the results of a survey carried out with visitors to the London Natural History Museum. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of a survey carried out with visitors to the London Natural History Museum. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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number
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 of visitors
of
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to
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 London Natural Museum History for 2000, 2010 and 2020.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of visitors increased for tourism and school
trip
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trips
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 over the years,
while
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 the remaining reasons showed
slight
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a slight
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 fluctuation in visitors.
Firstly
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, a significant increase was seen in
number
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 of tourists and school students. There were 7
tourist
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tourists
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 in 2000, which were increased to 13 in 2010 and followed by 22 in 2020.
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, students with school trips were 15 in 2000, 22 in 2010 and a slight decrease with 20 in 2020.
Furthermore
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, the reason ‘I came here to see specific displays’ given by people was 52, followed by
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
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number
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the number
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with
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of
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 48 and
with
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apply
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the
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a
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 slight increase of 54 over
the
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apply
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2000, 2010 and 2020 respectively. The work reason showed
a
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apply
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very little fluctuation with 11
number
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 in 2010, but
numbers
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the numbers
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 were
same
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the same
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 for 2000 and 2020.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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