Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argued that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both point of view and give your own opinion.
As we
believe that any Correct word choice
We
crimes
have any triggered
to do their actions. Within that, people argue if Replace the word
trigger
individuals
get involve
in any kind Change the form of the verb
involved
or
Correct your spelling
of
crimes
will get the same Fix the agreement mistake
crime
punishments
, whether it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
based
Add a missing verb
is based
from
their Change preposition
on
circumstances
or motivation. But, in my opinion, it has to be treated with different punishments
, which is motivation
for committing Add an article
the motivation
a motivation
Correct article usage
the needs
needs
to punish more rather than based on the Fix the agreement mistake
need
circumstances
of an individual.
On the first
hand, people who have motivation Correct word choice
other
for
committing a Change preposition
to
crime
has
a realization of their steps and goals Correct subject-verb agreement
have
what
they need to achieve. Correct word choice
that
Moreover
, in this
crime
their feelings Add a comma
crime,
also
involve like
anger, revenge, greed, lust, and other negative feelings to Change preposition
apply
making
Wrong verb form
make
this
crime
achieved. For example
, corruption
, if the Change preposition
in corruption
individuals
that
already Correct pronoun usage
apply
had
anything but still cannot Wrong verb form
have
fulfill
their Change the spelling
fulfil
greedy
, they will Replace the word
greed
planning
to try making a scheme Wrong verb form
plan
which
they can Change preposition
in which
got
free money from Change the verb form
get
illegal
Add an article
the illegal
an illegal
resource
. From Fix the agreement mistake
resources
this
crime
, we need to give the criminals more punishments
like send
them to Wrong verb form
sending
a
jail and Remove the article
apply
take
all their wealth.
Wrong verb form
taking
On the other hand
, people who have a bad
Correct the article-noun agreement
bad circumstances
a bad circumstance
circumstances
like poverty and cannot work to fulfill
their basic needs because of something. In Change the spelling
fulfil
this
situation, they cannot do
proper plans, or make some steps Verb problem
make
to
because Change preposition
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
the
poverty Correct article usage
apply
forced
them to Wrong verb form
forces
do
Verb problem
commit
a
Correct article usage
apply
crime
so they can live Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
more
longer. Change the word
apply
Moreover
, they do not really target some specific individuals
also
do the Correct pronoun usage
who also
crime
roughly. With this
situation, we need different
approach for them, rather than to punish them Add an article
a different
to put
Change preposition
by putting
in
Correct pronoun usage
them in
a
jail, we can try Remove the article
apply
put
them on a foundation Fix the infinitive
to put
then
give them some education and a better place to live.
In conclusion, Correct word choice
and then
punishments
should be given for every crimes
that Change to a singular noun
crime
happened
. Wrong verb form
happens
However
, individuals
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
did
some Verb problem
committed
crimes
because of their circumstances
need to dig more for
their Change preposition
into
crime
and give them different Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
punishment
.Fix the agreement mistake
punishments
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