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The map describes the development of a college campus in 2005 and 2015.

The map describes the development of a college campus in 2005 and 2015.
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The map shows a developing
campus
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 throughout the year of 2005 to 2015.
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, there are 5 big buildings located separately and one wide lake around the land
campus
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. Those buildings are connected by road and trees are
also
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 spread infrequently around every side of
campus
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. Most of the areas of
this
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campus
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 are barren and missing the beauty aspects of nature. There is one complex building near the lake which contains student facilities, shops offices, etc. In front of it located two buildings dorm made for student to accommodate their place to live. The science building is placed across the art building divided by the road of the
campus
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.
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, another student accommodation is located far and is separated from the other building but it still could be reached by road.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words campus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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