Some people believe that technology has led to many positive developments in their lives, while others think technology is gradually taking over control of the way people live. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasoas for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or xperience
"Today, as computer technology is increasingly developing, machines have become an indispensable part of life, especially in the fields of health and education. In every aspect, technology can be Used effectively, it is a factor to help people exploit for the development of society.
On the one hand, the benefits of industrialization
bring
many advantages Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
such
as improvements in the development of new industries and services. For example
, as the COVID-19 pandemic spread, the convenience of computers
was widely used, making it more convenient to communicate with distant relatives and friends during quarantine or to shop for essential items. Weakness during quarantine is more beneficial. Especially in the medical field, people have found many ways to treat incurable diseases and invented many types of vaccines. Or in
terms of education, Correct word choice
In
computers
have contributed to teaching and creativity in education, on the internet it is possible to store and search huge amounts of information.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of computer technology are limited creativity, loss of important skills such
as direct communication and thinking, problem solving
, privacy risks and violation of personal information. or Add a hyphen
problem-solving
due to
increasing automation, a large number of workers may lose their jobs. And letting
children use Correct word choice
Letting
computers
too early can affect their development and thinking. And above all
, there are some negative problems it brings such
as social network addiction and game addiction, causing a number of negative impacts on society.
In short, everything has two sides, computers
have undeniably brought many advancements and conveniences to our lives, from improving communication to creating new industries. Therefore
, using computers
wisely and alertly is necessary."Submitted by duongthimyquyen031002 on
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Task Achievement
Ensure the introduction briefly outlines both views and your opinion to set a clear direction for the essay.
Task Achievement
Develop your points by expanding on how technology influences both positive and negative aspects of life, ensuring to balance the discussion of both sides.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to show relationships between ideas more clearly and to improve the flow of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea supported by examples or explanations.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
