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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The graph shows the monthly average daily maximum and minimum
temperatures
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 for
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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. The chart illustrates the average number of
days
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 with rain for these two cities per month.
Overall
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, daily average
temperatures
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 decreased between
Februrary
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February
 and July in both cities. The average number of
days
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 with rainfall was generally higher in
Brisbane
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,
although
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 the figure was higher in
Canberra
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 from June to October. In January, the average daily temperature was about 27
degrees
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 for both cities, peaking at 30
degrees
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 in
Brisbane
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 in February,
while
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 remaining
contstant
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constant
contestant
 in
Canberra
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.
Whereas
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temperatures
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 remained higher in
Brisbane
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, the average maximum
temperatures
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 decreased from February to July, when they were 21
degrees
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 and 11
degrees
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 in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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, respectively. They
then
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 rose steadily to
readh
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reach
reads
 29
degrees
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 in
Brisbane
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 and 27
degrees
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 in
Canberra
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 in December. The average number of
days
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 with rainfall fluctuated between 12 and 14 between December and March in
Brisbane
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, compared with 7
days
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 from June to September.
In contrast
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, the figures for
Canberra
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 were more constant, ranging between 7 to 8
days
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 per month from November to May,
then
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 rose to 10
days
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 per month from June to August.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, brisbane, canberra, days, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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