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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The graph shows the monthly average daily maximum and minimum
temperatures
 for
Brisbane
 and
Canberra
. The chart illustrates the average number of
days
 with rain for these two cities per month.
Overall
, daily average
temperatures
 decreased between
Februrary
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February
 and July in both cities. The average number of
days
 with rainfall was generally higher in
Brisbane
,
although
 the figure was higher in
Canberra
 from June to October. In January, the average daily temperature was about 27
degrees
 for both cities, peaking at 30
degrees
 in
Brisbane
 in February,
while
 remaining
contstant
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constant
contestant
 in
Canberra
.
Whereas
temperatures
 remained higher in
Brisbane
, the average maximum
temperatures
 decreased from February to July, when they were 21
degrees
 and 11
degrees
 in
Brisbane
 and
Canberra
, respectively. They
then
 rose steadily to
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reach
reads
 29
degrees
 in
Brisbane
 and 27
degrees
 in
Canberra
 in December. The average number of
days
 with rainfall fluctuated between 12 and 14 between December and March in
Brisbane
, compared with 7
days
 from June to September.
In contrast
, the figures for
Canberra
 were more constant, ranging between 7 to 8
days
 per month from November to May,
then
 rose to 10
days
 per month from June to August.
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